I am bilingual, French – English, my mother tongue is French although I have worked and lived in English most of my adult life. I would suggest you have a French language specialist do some editing and check your French thoroughly – to me it does not sound right (it has all the hallmarks of Google Translation, which is actually quite atrocious). In fact, to me, it sounds like a literal translation from English and that clearly doesn’t work. Sorry to be so brutal, but there it is.
